Waves crashing against the beach
Children screaming with joy
The smell of fresh air tingles your nose
The sudden mist of ocean water hitting your skin
You look out and see and endless blue water
The bitter taste of salt water entering your mouth
How sweet it is to be free
9 comments:
Nice Job keep up the good work.
nice poem. makes me feel like im at the beach.
Spelling: "nose hair," not "noise hair" but I'd cut the "hair" part anyway--too gross. fix the spelling of "and" in the 5th line and I'd say "endless blue water" instead of the color of, etc.
Good poem! Thanks for sahring it.
I like your poem....great job!
It is a very beautiful poem! It made me feel like i was actually at the beach. You are a very talented writer. Keep up the great work!
This is very good! I do agree that there are some spelling errors to be worked on, but that was already commented on. Nice Job.
I love the last line. It really does like bring me into it. It's very good.
~K~
This is great. The last line is my favorite. You are a very creative writer. Nice job :]
hey mike, your not a bad poem writer! dang good actually! i love how its all about being free and your self.
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