Every year they gather at the waters edge They come in swarms of grey and black To do natures duty Some are big and some are small But they all come for the same reason Now there are fifty Tomorrow there will be hundreds As life must go on
This is really good! You've succeeded at writing a poem about the suckers, which I have failed miserably at. I think I'd take out "the circle of" and just say "life goes on" to avoid the cliche. Great job!
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This is really good! You've succeeded at writing a poem about the suckers, which I have failed miserably at. I think I'd take out "the circle of" and just say "life goes on" to avoid the cliche. Great job!
nice job Michael i think that was a great poem and it was really easy to read i think your getting really good at this luv ya bud!
Go Michael, Go Michael... way to write that sweet poem! i loved it..
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