I like the line that says "waiting to come alive again." and everything is dark now." this was a good poem i liked this porm alot. keep up the good work.
Good job Mike. I love the "it remembers the parties/when the nights would never end. " I would move the line "waiting to come alive again" to the end. It is too powerful to be at the beginning. The end would then be: "the times that the house was living/now waiting to come alive again" or something like that. I don't like the now but I can't think of anything better. Great poem.
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SWEET! I like how it describes a "forgotten house" in the middle of nowhere. I also like how the house "remembers the parties." Awesome!
I like the line that says "waiting to come alive again." and everything is dark now." this was a good poem i liked this porm alot. keep up the good work.
i like how you describe the empty house on the lake waiting to be used.
Good job Mike. I love the "it remembers the parties/when the nights would never end. " I would move the line "waiting to come alive again" to the end. It is too powerful to be at the beginning. The end would then be: "the times that the house was living/now waiting to come alive again" or something like that. I don't like the now but I can't think of anything better. Great poem.
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